Monday, 4 May 2020

writing end

I made a trail of potato chips that led into the chamber. Then I could pull the lever the other way. One part worked and the alien turned human but I couldn't get any of the virus. Maybe if I take the metal pipes that led to the ceiling and put a cup there so the virus will clog in the cup. I tried again and this time the alien turned human and the virus got jammed inside the cup. Bam I’m a genius. I decided instead of just taking down the “bad guy” I should just make it back home. So I did the trick a million more times (it felt like) and now everyone was human and all was left to do was go home.
But I already was.

6 comments:

  1. I haven't read the whole story but I do like the first sentence, I couldn't help but imagine that trail of potato chips!

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  2. What a genius you are (and so modest!). It has been great reading all the different parts of your story, Alan. You have shown good perserverance and creativity in writing this story. Kapai!

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  3. Kia ora Alan - your first sentence certainly got my attention - nice work! Your writing is very clear and easy to follow; I could imagine this as a short film. Genius indeed!

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  4. Kia ora, Alan. The ending to your story now has me intrigued as I want to know what happened to get to this point. As Mrs Haines and Miss Whysall said, the first sentence about potato chips got my attention. Well done.

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  6. Kia ora bro, sad that the story has ended but that was funny with the potato chips and that was a nice ending. How many bags of potato chips would you use?

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