Tuesday, 28 April 2020

writing part 4

The hairs at the back of my neck stood up and goosebumps rose from my skin as I shivered in fear. One entered the store and did this laser thing to check if anyone was there. When the laser reached us I ran across to the other side of the laser so that when the robot checks the image I look like a small blair just a thin straight line I think it worked. The robot leaves and as I stand up the robot comes back with a whole gang of weird people, robots and aliens. One of the people winked at me and started speaking like robots do in anime. “D-I-E” he says. I think they were trying to act like robots. It's working but I must say putting a bunch of potato chip bags on yourself is not a good idea… but it's working. The guy comes up to me and puts me in licorish cuffs. I laugh a little.
They take me to what I think is their HQ. Why did they just take me and not my friends? The place is just a dome covered with shiny things and in the center is this big sphere ball made of glass and these metal wires coming out of it connecting to the roof. Soon I realized that it was  placed inside the thing. When the things were all looking away I ate the licorish when I was finished I ran away without being caught. I feel like they let me out on purpose. I ran for a while then I just felt sleepy and went inside the nearest building and napped a little. I thought about what I could do in my nap. I fell asleep and woke up to the sound of footsteps.

2 comments:

  1. Potato chip camouflage and liquorice cuffs!!! It sounds like a very 'yummy' kind of adventure.
    I really like the way you hooked the reader in with the first sentence and the last sentence leaves the reader wondering "what next?".

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  2. Kia ora Alan. Well this story took an unexpected turn! I found this part a little harder to follow but I like how you have tried to add humour into your writing. Just like all the rest of your writing parts, you have left the reader wanting more. Excellent skill in writing. Keep up the great work!

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